2024年6月16日发(作者：)

温州二模

第二节(满分 25 分)

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Julia always enjoyed running through The Dark Walk towards the light at the end of it. lt was dark,

damp tunnel(道)made of smooth year she had the extra joy of showing it to her

small brother, Stephen, and of terrifying him as well as day they found a hole on one

side of the walk. Inside there was water, in which they perceived a panting trout（喘息的酶

鱼).They were both so excited that they were no longer afraid of the darkness as they bent down

and peered at the fish panting in his tiny prison, his silver stoma going up and down like an

engine, otherwise he was wondered what he ate and thought of his hunger. She

found him a ignored the food, and just went on panting, Bending over him, she thought

how he had been in there. All the winter, in the dark tunnel, all day. all nigh floating around

alone.

Nobody know how the fish got there. Her mother suggested that a bird had carried the egg Her

father thought that in the winter a small stream might have carried it down there as a baby and it

had been safe until summer came and the water began to dry they went to bed,

Stephen asked his mummy the whole story of the trout, not really interested in the actual trout,

but in the story which his mum began to make up for him, and Julia in her bed, presented her

back to them and read her book .But she kept one ear cocked "And so,in the end, the naughty

fish got bigger and bigger. and the water got smaller and smaller”Passionately, she turned around

and cried “Mummy, don't make it a horrible old moral story" Her mom even brought in a

fairy ,who had made it rain and filled the hole. so that the trout could float away down the river

below , Staring at the moon she knew there was no such thing as a fairy and that the trout, down

in the tunnel. was panting for his life.

注意:

1.按写词数应为 150左右

2.请按如下格式在答题卷的相应位置作答

Paragraph1 She sat up in the silent night and Stephen was sound asleep.

Paragraph2Julia poured the trout out of the pot into the river

第一步:SPLIT+3C法分析

Setting:

The Dark Walk a dark, damp tunnel

Plot(character):开篇交代

Julia 和弟弟 Stephen 喜欢探索黑暗潮湿的隧道， 有一天他们发现一条来历不明的正在喘

息着的鱼，妈妈说是小鸟把这条鱼带到了这个洞里。爸爸认为可能是冬天这条鱼还很小的时

候一条小溪把它带过来的，但到了夏天溪水干涸，它就被困在这了。

莱莉娅很担心鳞鱼总是在一个位地方，没有空间转身，它那银色的肚皮就得不停地上下翻滚，

否则它就无法动弹。她还很好奇那条尊鱼吃什么，然后想到了它一定在挨饿。她为它找到了

一条虫子但它根本没去理睬虫子，只是继续在水里喘息着。弯腰看着这条鱼，她心里想:整

个冬天，当自己每天在学校上学的时候，它一直在这个小洞里。整个冬天，无论白天还是黑

夜，它一直在这个漆黑的随道里孤独地游来游去。而妈妈却告诉弟弟会有仙女来拯救，莱莉

娅拒绝相信童话凝视着挂在空中的月亮，知道这个世界上根本没有仙女，而困在隧道里的那

条尊鱼正在为了生存拼命地喘息。

第一段:她在寂静的夜晚坐了起来，斯蒂芬睡得很熟.....

第二段亲莉亚把鱼从罐子里倒进了河里。.....

Theme (clue and conflict)

Conflict:

母亲给弟弟讲不切实际的故事 VS Julia 只相信行动才能解决问题，她理解生命，同情并怜悯

生命，她知道自由与光明对生命的意义，也只有她能解救尊鱼于困境。

Clue:

Julia poured the trout out of the pot into the river.

Julia always enjoyed running through The Dark Walk towards the light at the end of it.

突出的主题是:人与社会 之人与动物， Julia 对生命的理解与怜悯，并付诸于拯救行动

续写的最后一句可能性

Possible version 1 : Hadn't it been for Julia's bravery and Mom's weird story, the trout couldn't

have run through the dark hole towards the light river.

Possible version 2: Staring at the disappearing trout, she felt as if it were waving goodbye to he

rand saying " Thanks for your bravery and wisdom,shinning girl."

Possible version 3: The words kept echoing in my mind ever since. Even now , I am constantly

reminded of the experience, where l got the lesson ---every creature has its right for the light.

第二步 线写情节构思

Paragraph 1

She sat up in the silent night and Stephen was sound asleep

情境1 Julia 独自溜出去拯救鱼

情境2 想办法抓住尊鱼

情境3 把鱼带出隧道，奔向河边

Paragraph 2

Julia poured the trout out of the pot into the river

情境1 看着恢复自由的鱼幸福感油然而生

情境2跑回去告诉家人

情境3 家人表扬Julia

language

动作描写

as they bent down and peered at the fish panting in his tiny prison, his silver stoma going up and

down like an engine, otherwise he was motionless.(E请语+比喻)

Imitate

All horror gave its way to a sense of responsibility , it welling up in her heart and surging through

her like boiling water.

所有的恐惧都变成了一种责任感，它在她心中涌起来，像沸水一样在她心中涌动。

Huffing and puffing, Julia bent down, gently cupped the poor creature into the pot, and belted to

the river at full speed.

莱莉亚气喘吁吁，弯下腰，轻轻地把这个可怜的家伙塞进锅里，全速跑到河边。

心理描写

Bending over him, she thought how he had been in there. All the winter, in the dark tunnel all day

all night floating around alone.

" Never can the small hole be your prison. She murmured to the panting creature , " but how can

I help you ?”“这个小洞永远不能成为你的牢笼”她对那个喘气的尊鱼说:“可是我怎么能帮

助你呢?

情绪描写

They were both so excited that they were no longer afraid of the darkness

Imitate

Julia was so anxious and eager to save the trout that she was no longer afraid of the

loneliness in the dark night.

朱莉亚如此渴望救这条鱼，以至于她不再害怕在黑夜中的孤独了

语言描写

Passionately, she turned around and cried “mummy, don't make it a horrible old moral story

Imitate

Amazingly, Stephen jumped and yelled " You must be the very fairy”, his eyes twinkling like a

diamond.

惊喜地，斯蒂芬跳了起来，喊道“你一定是那个仙女”他的眼睛像钻石一样闪闪发光

可以引用的词句

Julia always enjoyed running through The Dark Walk towards the light at the end of it.

Prison , panting,fill the hole, a fairy

参考答案：

She sat up in the silent night and Stephen was sound asleep. She tiptoed out the bedroom and

dashed to the poor trout with a pot . All horror gave its way to a sense of responsibility ,welling

up in her heart and surging through her, Never can the small hole be your prison, She

murmured to the panting creature , “ but how can I help you ?" Suddenly, it dawned on her that

maybe she could pick her Mom's brain-- fill the hole with stones. Next 3 hours witnessed Julia's

effort in creeping up the water with stones, Finally, she gripped it,shoved it into the pot and

raced out the walk down to the poured the trout out of the pot into the river. Staring at

the disappearing trout, Julia grinned from ear to ear, a wave of happiness flooding over her.

Without any delay, she sprinted back home like an arrow and announced the incredible news to

the whole family. Having confirmed what she had done, her parents gave a thumbs up to praise

her. " You must be the very fairy” yelled Stephen, his eyes twinkling like a diamond. The bright

smile from everyone lit up The Dark walk .Hadn't it been for Julia's bravery and Mom's weird

story, the trout couldn't have run through the dark hole towards the light river.